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CCP Abraxas
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Posted - 2008.05.13 10:40:00 -
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I'm putting up this thread so that people can discuss the next chronicle when we publish it this coming Monday, May 19. I'll be in London then, but I trust in CCP machinery to get the thing out on time. It's a weird'un, but I'll give you a hint: The protagonist (such as he is) is a Caldarian. Here's a sneak peek:
"The body begins to change. Since the chemicals are initially pumped away from the heart, the first parts affected are the limbs and the less complex internal organs; and, of course, the blood. Regular blood cells begin to die off, their walls eaten up by the intrusive substance while new, more robust ones are pumped out of bone marrow by the millions. These new cells, whose oxygen-carrying capability far exceeds that of the old and dying ones, grow to maturity in a matter of instants. The lungs then kick in, their alveoli adapting to letting in more oxygen than this body has ever been able to assimilate. The muscles swiftly respond, followed by various other organs, gorging themselves on this new red breath."
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Ethidium Bromide
ZEALOT WARRIORS AGAINST TERRORISTS
Curatores Veritatis Alliance
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Posted - 2008.05.13 11:00:00 -
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that's cruel
almost another week to go! looking forward to it as always
 Originally by: George Petsch
Nochricht: Dei schwarer StroinlSser trifftn Karli[Baatzis] und ruiniert erm so richtig de Dosn, 1343.7 schhodn, oida.
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Elise Masutra
Tleilex Manufacturing
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Posted - 2008.05.13 12:05:00 -
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How can you tease us and then say it will take a week! Please stop hurting our feelings 
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Kyoko Sakoda
Caldari
Ghost Festival
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Posted - 2008.05.13 16:38:00 -
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I'm tickled, honestly.
Ghost Festival is recruiting. |
Lost Hamster
Serenity and Hungarian Operational Team
Tenth Legion
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Posted - 2008.05.16 09:47:00 -
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Originally by: Ethidium Bromide
that's cruel
Indeed...
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Javiir Soban
Caldari
Amarrian Religious Reformation Society Exalted
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Posted - 2008.05.17 01:18:00 -
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You sir, are quite cruel. Have a decent trip to London as well.
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Aravorn
Gallente
The Dead Parrot Shoppe Inc.
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Posted - 2008.05.19 00:21:00 -
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Looking forward to this!
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ISD BH Garik Michaels
ISD BH
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Posted - 2008.05.19 11:23:00 -
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I saw this last week and didn't click on the thread for this very reason. Abraxas, you tease.
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Rosa Rosette
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Posted - 2008.05.19 14:20:00 -
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hands shaking....
need my read fix now!
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Aslann
Gallente
Win and God
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Posted - 2008.05.19 18:07:00 -
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Sooo, gives?
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Zex Maxwell
Caldari
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Posted - 2008.05.19 21:44:00 -
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I like the read. but i could not put my finger on what it was all about. |
Ricky Bolt
Caldari Provisions
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Posted - 2008.05.19 22:30:00 -
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To me it sounds like what happens when you terminate a character and they are "recycled into the Empire's bio-mass". The sudden crushing at the end certainly seems to fit the sound effects involved.
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AVTOKRATOR
Caldari
Mystic Knights
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Posted - 2008.05.19 23:43:00 -
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aye, it's a very good read.
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Typhado3
Minmatar
Ashen Lion Mining and Production Consortium
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Posted - 2008.05.19 23:58:00 -
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it seems abraxas has trained 'ccp - anticipation torture' to lvl 5... that's an all to common skill lately (waiting for dev blogs on FW)...
interesting story though I wonder who that person was. Was he a test subject for bio upgrades? or was he some super soldier?
also since i'm paying 4 mil+ isk for my clone I hope a few of the things he had comes standard.
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Kudon Astraisx
Minmatar
17th Minmatar Tactical Wing
Electus Matari
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Posted - 2008.05.20 01:02:00 -
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From http://www.eve-online.com/empyreanage/index.html :
"A clone with no name or past awakens to a cruel existence, hunted mercilessly for crimes he may never know; yet he stands close to the pinnacle of power in New Eden."
Hmm?
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Genki SG
Beyond All Frontier
White Core
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Posted - 2008.05.20 01:31:00 -
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"A Life in Three Acts" - the text has three sections, very clever 
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Quinn DelTirith
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Posted - 2008.05.20 06:30:00 -
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I definitely haven't a clue what the story is really about.
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Juxstaposed
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Posted - 2008.05.20 07:13:00 -
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Seems to me like its human/genetic? experimentation to create a host that could handle this process without popping, it talks of strengthening the body under a very rigorous and potentially dangerous method.
the last part seems to me like an attempted escape, and getting gunned down.
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Melor Rend
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Posted - 2008.05.20 11:47:00 -
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It sounds like a genetically / biologically engineered soldier. I assume this because of the line about "... and react through hand movements, either a wave or a slight pull of a finger".
Sounds like the thing can advance, duck, analyze then aim (wave) and shoot (pull the trigger) then rinse and repeat.
My first thought (before reading that the "protagonist" is a Caladri) was that this could be a Jovian Grunt or something... but maybe this is the Caldari's first attempt at creating a tech 2 Tube Child with increased armor resists? 
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DaXes Halleck
Amarr
G.B.H.D
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Posted - 2008.05.20 14:36:00 -
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The line about alcohol ingestion sounds like it's not simply a will-less "drone" soldier.
Bio-engineered yes, but not mindlessly robotic.
We see the process, stimuli and responses from the inside of the body as a machine at the cellular level, but we do not see this from the view person's consciousness.
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Fehn Gamin
Minmatar
Pator Tech School
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Posted - 2008.05.20 16:21:00 -
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Clinical Poetry? Very nice medical authenticity. I hope the following is not too much analysis for a piece of literature that has an obvious intentionally indirect style.
There is an interesting progression between the 'acts':
1. Transformation from normal via chemical injection.
2. Training the body with rigors.
3. The body failing under deadly force.
What I can infer: The body is in custody, potentially by the same owner in acts 1 and 2, since both the chemical injections and rigors appear to be external forms of training.
In act 2, the body is also clearly in someone's care/custody, deduced from the assumption that the injection of sedative, application of unknown medical agent at the back muscle, and the electrical field applied to the torso could not be accomplished by the body itself while enduring the 'spasm'.
It seems as if something important is taking place between acts 2 and 3. I take the 'lift', 'drop', and 'different air smell' at the end of act 2 to mean the body is being released to a new environment. My question here is: "Who is doing the releasing? And why?"
Act 3 has some potentially interesting plot lines. The focus has shifted and now instead of training stimuli, the body is reacting to its environment, and apparently its brain's choices. My highly speculative guesses:
Trouble sleeping: the subject is on the run and has trouble sleeping since it is brought to full attention at the slightest suspicion.
Trouble with self preservation and/or social integration in the new environment: I believe the reference to the prefrontal cortex is a significant one. In my search of the topic I discovered this: Many diseases, such as schizophrenia, bipolar disorder and ADHD, have been related to dysfunction of the prefrontal cortex. and This brain region has been implicated in planning complex cognitive behaviors, personality expression, and moderating correct social behavior. The basic activity of this brain region is considered to be orchestration of thoughts and actions in accordance with internal goals.
It seems that the change in diet could either be the brain learning to modify what is ingested to improve performance, or the body getting aid from a more knowledgeable source (envision a kind older woman feeding soup).
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This2ndGuy
Gallente
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Posted - 2008.05.20 17:28:00 -
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Clearly this is a Caldari that goes throught bootcamp, trains and becomes a soldier. Then crushed by some form of tank. I love the point of view.
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LordSwift
New Eden Regimental Navy
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Posted - 2008.05.20 20:50:00 -
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Well that was a shocking read. Really interesting but still wow. Sounds a little like a person getting podded while using boosters to help in a fight.
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Sitthh
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Posted - 2008.05.21 01:30:00 -
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This story was awsome because of the suspence and the level of detail. CCP was smart to hire a talented writer like yourself. I can't wait for the next story.
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Zuko Droner
Dominion of Chaos
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Posted - 2008.05.21 16:13:00 -
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Sounds like someone being adapted and trained for infantry combat. I'm glad I'm in a pod.
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Alex Bester
Aeon Foundation - Science and Research Division
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Posted - 2008.05.21 20:44:00 -
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Sounds to me like the life of a Tube-Child Soldier.
1. Birth (Creation/Augmentation)
2. Life (Test/Correction)
3. Death (Deployment/KIA)
I must go into space again,
to the lonely stars and the endless sky,
and all I ask for is a fast ship
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Nomakai Delateriel
Shadow Company
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Posted - 2008.05.22 02:09:00 -
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IMHO the last part sounds like being caught in an explosion.
So here is how I interpret the situation
Together with the loud whine before death I can only assume that this is the case of a bioengineered soldier.
The first two chapters are about his/her creation.
Then he/she is deployed in some sort of desert/vacuum environment (greater fluctuations in temperature).
His unit is under attack from artillery, he's rapidly sprinting from cover to cover, his rifle in his hand, being knocked down by nearby explosions, but he's protected by his suit from the deadly shrapnel so even when he's almost caught in blasts he still survives, despite the force being so powerful that he's knocked down.
Then finally there is the loud whine of an incoming shell (could be some sort of energy blast as well) and a direct hit. An explosive force that not even his augmented muscle, bone and armor can handle and he's ripped apart.
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Locutus ofBorg
The Raging Armada
Brutally Clever Empire
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Posted - 2008.05.22 04:41:00 -
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I support most of what you are saying except for the part about the suit, it clearly states that his skin touches a trigger
"the skin on the fingers cooling from steely contact."
Also to support your theory of military deployment we have the lines,
"The eardrums keep taking in and filtering everything they can, while both visual cortex and motor control narrow their focus, accomplishing in linear order several tasks that are so practiced they have long since been ingrained in the subconscious."
My interpretation of this is that the soldier in question does not have proper head gear to protect against concussions from explosions, this also shows that its in an atmospheric battle, and the several tasks that are so practiced hints towards military training which is practiced time and time again until perfected, this also suggests Caldari.
All in all this is an extremely deep read and I appreciate CCP's newfound attention to detail.
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Nomakai Delateriel
Shadow Company
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Posted - 2008.05.22 06:28:00 -
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Originally by: Locutus ofBorg
I support most of what you are saying except for the part about the suit, it clearly states that his skin touches a trigger
"the skin on the fingers cooling from steely contact."
Well, it could be that the gloves covering the fingers are thin enough to cool down from contact with the metal of his gun.
Or he isn't wearing a full body suit, which means that he's fighting in an atmosphere that at least isn't toxic (in other words, some sort of desert. Maybe a traditional desert, maybe just an environment that is poor at absorbing heat, and thus leading to sharp shifts in day and night temperature).
In any case it's not surprising. If you've ever worn hardtip gloves you'll know how incredibly clumsy you feel when you can't sense everything through your fingertips, so even if he wears gloves they're likely to be as thin as possible.
As for his headgear and concussions from explosions. After thinking about it I agree that it is taking place in some place that has an atmosphere. But when it comes to headgear... Concussive force is perhaps the most difficult to protect yourself from. In an explosion, no matter what you do you're going to take all of the force because it simply is brute force. No niceties like a gun or sword does, by increasing the force by dealing it in a smaller area. Concussive force from an explosion hits your entire body at the same time.
Bodyarmor can do nothing but spread out the impact (which is futile if your entire body is hit by the concussive force), and lengthen it over a very short period of time. Reducing a millisecond of trauma so that it instead impacts under force/x for Time*x. Ie, reducing impulse but maintaining the force. The suits ability to do this is limited by the deformation zone. The larger the deformation zone, the more the suit can reduce impulse.
Since a bodyarmor needs to be agile there isn't much of a deformation zone.
In fact, I think the soldier is wearing very advanced headgear. A normal human, or even a super-enhanced human would be blind and deaf after being thrown around by an explosion. Well, maybe not blind, but definitely deaf since the explosion would have ruptured his eardrums (no matter how super-enhanced those eardrums would be).
What's making him dizzy is most likely the concussive force itself, throwing him around like a ragdoll. Transplanting vibrations through bone and muscle until the vibrations hits the brain, inner ear. Distorting hearing and balance. Just like when you're at a disco you can hear the bass even if your ears are covered by protective earmuffs. Works on the same principle as a skull microphone. Only in reverse. |
Avtambaram
Aliastra
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Posted - 2008.05.22 20:53:00 -
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Do these modification of the body have anything to do with the Jovian genetic engineering? (I haven't read other posts in this thread due to constraints on available time. I apologise if this question has already been asked.)
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